Group poem

Please, not green pea soup! Leave me now before I love your devil thoughts Abandon my head, as you did my heart Touch me in the night and leave me distraught Broken down to ashes in the dark Tomorrow we will arise anew A new flame in the smouldering ash Is there a new sensation in the black around me? bad thoughts, ghosts, skeletons in the closet Black and blue is how I left you Your ghost shimmers cold in the deep sunlight Your image tells the tales of a horror Your plight naked as a jay bird left helpless in the night A sharp pain shoots through my spinal cord...

white pain feels like the brightest flame inside my tumour ridden brain I want to caress your broken soul To taste your pale blue lips, to feel your fettered whole Oblivion remains... My only refuge from you Shattered as the innocence of a child, young and abused Never to be whole again Live on for tomorrow, as the past is soiled, and the future uncertain, you will learn

(Shit stinks from the fettered minds of the oblivious remains of the dead refuge shattered and abused by the tumourrow ridden spinal whole)

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